Blue's Reviews #29

Before we begin, these oc’s all belong to their respectful creators, also even if the oc’s that I review get bad ratings please do not harass or attack the creators of said oc’s.

The next oc I’m going to review is emofrenchbrony.deviantart.com/…  by by the way my statements will have bold (these) around them. Also, as of now I will stop rating these characters since I believe it is simply not needed because this is just simply reviewing and building a character not figuring out how it outranks others. So, sorry if that disappointing the audience but I just don't see the need of it.

Full Name: Naomi Bird

(Is that her real name? I feel like this is more of an Alias or a title than anything due to the bird at the end and also Naomi originates from Hebrew or Japanese so maybe you could add why they would have given her that name)

Meaning of name: I've always wanted to use the name Naomi and Bird for her ability, as a ghost, to fly

(oh, cool)

Nickname(s): Nia, MiMi, Little Birdy

(Any reasons as to why she was given these nicknames?)

Creepy pasta Name: The Bird Lady

(I actually kind of like this creepy pasta name)

How Did They Get This Name and Why: When alive, she used to feed the birds

(alright, is that all? I feel like it would make more sense if she was kind of obsessed with birds and researched and studied them along with keeping and caring for them)

Gender: Female

Age: 18 at death, 34 in all

(hm, I think people may get a bit confused about this, maybe just say she died at 18, but has been a ghost for 34 years as of present day)

Date of Birth: May 30th, 1982

(So, I’m guessing she died in 2000, if my math is correct xD )

Place of Birth: France

Race/Species: Ghost/ Poltergeist

Native language: French

Languages spoken: French and English

(How did she learn? Why?)

Orientation/Sexual Preference: Bisexual

(Cool, Bisexuals are always welcome)

Zodiac Sign: Gemini

Religion: None

Occupation (before becoming a Pasta): Bird watcher/homeless

(wait, she was homeless?)

Are They Dead: Yes
If Yes, How’d They Die: She fell from a building when she tried to fly with the birds

(That death kind of reminds of the ‘Hey Arnold’ episode called Bird Man were Arnold meets a homeless man who lives on the roof of an abandoned complex and lives with the birds. In the end we take an inference that the old man died with said birds)

Date of Death: December 25th, 2000

(hey look, I was right xD)

Place of Death: The Eiffel Tower, France

(oh dear, maybe it shouldn’t of been on the Eiffel tower, I feel that it would of started a lot of attention so maybe make her die in a bit of a more secluded location)

~MEDICAL INFO~

Blood type: O-

(The Global donor)

Mental Disorder: Slight insanity and social awkwardness, and suicidal thoughts

(ok, I have a bit of a problem with this. Just to clear a little bit up, insanity is not just one thing, insanity isn’t even really a disorder. True, there are people with very unnerving habits, but they aren’t ‘insane’ I really suggest some research for actual mental disorders and not just some of the symptoms. Research can actual help a lot, trust me, it helps me most of the time)

Phobia(s): Anthrophobia, Acrophobia, and Acousticophobia 

Allergies: Bees, maple syrup, and poison ivy

(fair enough)

Habits: Chewing on her nails

Powers/Special Abilities: The ability to fly and control wind

(The Ability to hover or in-fact fly is fine, but maybe change the wind ability to moving or disturbing small object or telekinesis would be better, since she is a poltergeist. Though if you still want to incorporate a wind effect you can say when she is in a room with someone or something the room starts getting a light draft)

~APPEARANCE~

Height: 5'2" without her heels and 5'5" with them

Weight: As a ghost she is weightless

Hair color: Raven Black

(Just saying black is find ^^ some people find saying ‘Raven’ black hair makes it sounds a bit over the top exaggerated)

Hairstyle: Down with a braided band around the back of her scalp

Eye color: Green

Piercings: One on her tongue

Tattoos: A tramp stamp of broken wings with the saying "Ailes brisées de choses innommables" which in French means "Broken wings of unspeakable things"

(Okay, now I have no right to judge your decision of the tattoo, I actually do like the motto on it, but does it really need to be a tramp stamp? Though, then again since her outfit seems suitable for the innocent eyes of children xD, I can’t really say that it’s horrible)

Scars/Weird Marking(s): A scar on her neck from where she first tried suicide

Birthmark: One of a crown on her shoulder

Skin: Pale white

Clothing/Style: Simple purple shirt, jeans, and iron three inch heels

(man, those are more like weapons than shoes, I suggest you change them to be a bit more comfortable and usable)

Jewelry/Accessories: A ring on her left thumb of a skull and cross bones

Scent: The winter's air

(what does the Winter’s air smell like?)

Weapon(s): A whip and butter knife

(okay, small issue, I like the whip, the whip can stay, but the butter knife is absolutely useless in terms of killing. Seeing as is meant to cut butter and not human flesh, it simply isn’t strong or sharp enough)

Physical Disorder/Disability: She has a limp but nothing more

(why are her abilities so far away from her weaknesses, and where are her strengths?)

Never Seen Without: She always has on those shoes unless she is tied down

(why…would she be tied down?)

Other: She is very possessive over her stuff. If you touch it, she will scream and yell at you

(sounds like a legit thing that would happen)

~PERSONALITY~

Overall: She is very reserved and prefers to stay in her room until needed. She always keeps her door locked and phases through it to make sure that no one can get into it.

(I feel like this lack good traits, it feels unbalanced)

Likes: Personal space, the fact no one can touch her, and that she is safe and warm in a home

Dislikes: People who try to pick the lock to her room to see inside, Jeff in general, and people

Hobbies: Watching birds still 

Most Prized Possession: Her iron shoes

Flaws: Her timid nature

Pet Peeve: People who get too close to her

(mine is pretty much the same)

Worst Way To Die: In her opinion, by the hand of the one thing she loves. Heights.
Best Way To Die: Same, in a weird way

(the best way to die for me is to implode, idk why, but just simultaneously out of nowhere, it would be a great way to go out with a bang!)

Worst Way To Kill: Chopping into little bits or ripping them limb to limb
Best Way To Kill (how they kill): Hypnotizing them to jump off a building to their death in their sleep

(Hypnotizing? When did she learn to hypnotize people in their sleep?)

Targets To Killing: Those who are scared of heights or men and women who need to die

(Wait, 1^st of all how does she now they need to die? Does she have certain morals that they crossed 2^nd why people who are scared of heights. You don’t have an explanation for these thing)

Others: Nothing

Motto(s): "It's easier to fall than fly"

Crush/Greatest Love: Sadly none

Love Song: www.youtube.com/watch?v=TQR70K…

Theme Song: www.youtube.com/watch?v=OEVxOt…

Battle Song: www.youtube.com/watch?v=xgBOPe…

Favorite Season(s): Spring and Winter
Least Favorite Season(s): Summer

Favorite Food(s): Fried Shrimp
Least Favorite Food(s): Es Cargo

Favorite Drink(s): Shirley Temple
Least Favorite Drink(s): Pepsi

Favorite Color(s): Purple
Least Favorite Color(s): Orange

Favorite Number(s): 13 and 29
Least Favorite Number(s): 7

Favorite Holiday(s): Christmas
Least Favorite Holiday(s): Thanksgiving

Favorite Animal(s): Bluejay 
Least Favorite Animal(s): Hedgehog

Favorite Music: Indian and American
Least Favorite Music: Boy bands 

Favorite TV Show/Movie(s): Casablanca and Les Miserables
Least Favorite Show/Movie(s): Annie

Favorite Flower(s): Bluebell
Least Favorite Flower(s): Lilacs

Favorite Smell(s): Fresh air
Least Favorite Smell(s): Trash

Favorite Flavor(s): Baked goods
Least Favorite Flavor(s): rotten/ moldy foods

Favorite Meal: A roll, some corn, and small bits of meat
Least Favorite Meal: Trash

Favorite Place(s): Versailles
Least Favorite Place(s): The Eiffel Tower

Favorite Song(s): Once Upon a Dream
Least Favorite song(s): Anything rap

Favorite Video Game(s): Unknown
Least Favorite Video Game(s): Unknown

Favorite Subject(s): None
Least Favorite Subject(s): None

Favorite Shiny Thing(s): Her shoes and her ring
Least Favorite Shiny Thing(s): Cars

Seiyuu (Voice Actor/Actress): None

~FAMILY~

NONE

Other Pasta’s Thoughts:

Slenderman: Blowhard who THINKS he knows everything, but knows nothing

Splendorman: Fun and the best fatherly person

Trenderman: Wanna be that is a fashion fopa

Offenderman (aka Smexy): Whore. That's all

Ticci Toby: A very weird and unusual being

Lost Silver: Nice yet depressing

BRVR: ADORABLE!!!!! 

Glitchy Red: Likes Strangled better

Eyeless Jack: Confused by him

Laughing Jack: Nice yet a bit unnerving

Smile Dog: Concerning

Jeff the Killer: HATE HIM HATE HIM HATE HIM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Homicidal Liu: Wanna be killer, pasta, and everything else

Ben Drowned: Justin Bieber knock off

(I believe you might want to refrain from using popular creepy pasta characters in a serious character oc bio, makes it seem like people can differentiate your oc and theirs. Also, I believe that your using the idea that the characters all live in a ’slender-man mansion’ If I am correct I suggest you to not use it seriously in your character backstory due to the fact that it just isn’t a very good way to go about doing things in the fandom)